Of course it has errors, it's a draft!
This attempt at retelling the Twilight story is well written. Edward's point of view is quite interesting. I read the entire Twilight saga and sometimes you get fed up with Bella's angst, lack of self-esteem and obsession with her age. It's not that I hate the books, totally the opposite, I devoured each book, but it's easy to experience a Bella overdose.
I hope Meyer understands that she should finish this draft, make it a book and publish it.